Matthew


 * What did you do last night with George? Tell me where you went, what you did, who you saw, and about the most exciting activity together. I also want you to tell me where you and George would like to go on vacation and why. Remember, don't leave any information out of your story and write in complete sentences.**

Start writing here. -> My dad picked me up from school. I did some of my homework and my dad made me some super. Me and George finished my homework. Then me and George wated**(watched)** some T.V ,and played some video games and played on the computer. We wated**(watched)** some more T.V untill my mom came home from work. Oce**(Once)** my mom came home from work I went on the computer to write what George and I did.

My most exciting thing I did was to play on the computer.

Where I whould like to take George is to Washington D.C to go see the Vietnam Wall and to go see my popops friends who past away in war. I also want to go see the N.R.A Museum and to go see the monuments in Washington D.C. Great journal entry. It is very touching that you want to take George to see the Vietnam Wall in Washington D.C. I want you to focus on making each thought a different sentence when your do you next writing. I fixed this one because you kept using the word "and" where you should put a period. I hope you are ready for Koda because a Bear can get restless.**
 * Matthew,

Before you start writing read over your last entry and my suggestions to you. Try to make this one better then the last one. Don’t forget to answer all my questions.**
 * What did you do with Koda last night? Tell me where you went, who you saw, and about all the fun you had. Please do not leave out a detail. Also, if you could be an animal, what animal would you be and why?

Start writing here.-->I got home from school and me and Koda did my homework and finished my homework and my dad made me some super. When I was done eating my super we went on my moms computer. Then my mom came home and we went to Best Buy and we got movies, vidogames,and my moms new laptop.Then we went home and my mom worked on her computer.Then me and my brother Aaron went to bed.

If I was a animal I whould be a eagle because I could hunt for fish in the rivers and I can hunt for deer, and why I what to be a eagle because people respect the bold eagle and thats why I what to be a bald eagle.