Kyle


 * What did you do last night with George? Tell me where you went, what you did, who you saw, and about the most exciting activity together. I also want you to tell me where you and George would like to go on vacation and why. Remember, don't leave any information out of your story and write in complete sentences.**

Start writing here. ->Last night I took George to the park. We went on the slide and the swings. Then we went to my house and watched Spongebob Squarepants for 30 minutes.Then we outside again to ride my scooter for 1 hour. Then George got started to get tired. He slepped for a half a hour. At 7.00 George needed a drink. I gave him some water to drink. Then I gave him a snack. I gave him two cookies. The cookie colors were purple and pink. Then we watched some more spongebob squarepants. Then we went to my room and we played video games. We played a game called Madden Football 2009. We played Madden 09 for 1 hour and 30 minutes. Then I went down stairs for snack. I had a cheeseburger with cheese and some kethup. When I came upstairs I saw George sleeping on my own bed. George had all my blankets on were**(where)** I was sitting. Then I turn off my Xbox360 and I begain to watch some t.v. George woke up after I turned off my t.v. at 7.30. After he woke up I took George outside to talk together. Then I said i"m going to be a zombie for halloween. After that we went bed and falled**(fell)** asleep at 9.00pm. Then we woke up at 7.00am and got dressed. When we got on the bus I said this the last day buddy to have you. When I got into class and said I do not want to give you up buddy. When class started I said I do not want to give you up. This was a great journal entry. You and George had an amazing time together. My one suggestion for you would be to not start so many sentences with the word "then". It takes away from all your great details that you have added to you story. Next time I think you need to let Koda play your Wii Fit with you. I think some Yoga would help loosen him up. Keep up the awesome work!**
 * Kyle,

Before you start writing read over your last entry and my suggestions to you. Try to make this one better then the last one. Don’t forget to answer all my questions.**
 * What did you do with Koda last night? Tell me where you went, who you saw, and about all the fun you had. Please do not leave out a detail. Also, if you could be an animal, what animal would you be and why?

Start writing here.-->Last night I let Koda go into my tree, my moms stocking, and the snow. At 4:00 I let Koda go on the Wii Fit and do Yoga. After that we went to my room and played Family Guy on my Play Station 2. After that we went outside and played in the snow at 8:00 at night on Thursday. Then at 9:00 we went to sleep and watch television all night.On Friday we woke up drank some coffee and took a shower.Then at 8:00 we went to my Nanas house and played Jaws on Play Station 2 all day. When my dad picked me up and told him could I go sleigh riding today and he said yes you can. After that we went sleigh riding down at the three dips. Then we got a drink of hot chocolate and play Xbox360 at 7:00.After that we watched a show called Ghost Adventuers and it was scary.Then we all fell asleep and a dvd on t.v. On the weekend we went and played in the for two hours then we fell asleep and watched The Wizard of oz.Then we dinner with my Nana. Then we took a shower then got ready for bed and for school. On Monday I took him to my Nanas house to 10:15 then I got my coat, gloves, and hat on for school. Then we got to school and said I do not want to lose you. Then i had give him up for good. If I was a animal I would be a deer.